This October issue of "The Artist's Magazine" contained this critique under the feature, Art Clinic, critiqued by artist, Greg Albert, who "saw" so many pertinent and positive things. And, his suggestions for improvement were right on the money.
When reading Greg A.'s critiques, one learns the fine points of HOW to critique, (describing all good artistic techniques first, then following up with suggestions for improvement.) There's a lot to learn by paying attention to this kind of critique.
(Click on the page below to enlarge to read. Then, if needed, do, Ctrl+) Very astute critique.
Now, did I learn anything from this critique? Actually, quite a bit and a very important technique. What Greg Albert zeroed in on is important to the painting. I enjoyed reading his verbalization of what I was portraying. Very intensive and comprehensive critique. I love the way he uses an actual painting to "teach". I especially learned that when reviewing and analyzing one's painting one last time, to look for places and edges of confusion as one scans over all. I totally missed the areas he pointed out and will rectify those areas in the near future. Like he said they are easily fixed in this painting. Just should be done to carry it to the next level.